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    A Light in your Darkness Pamela's Avatar
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    Andrew says:
    I stand in this dream.
    Roses are around.
    And than I look.
    And I see her.

    She runs to me.
    As I do to her.
    And than we embrace.
    And than I wake.

    How I wish to be her's again.
    Than my life would be full.
    The chance to hold her.
    To kiss her.

    This is why I stay.
    To make her happy.
    And fulfill her dreams.
    This is my path.

    This is my dream


    By: Frai7ty


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    thats quite a nice poem. did that guy just make that up on the spot or did he just copy and paste it from somewhere? cause it really good



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    He had written it earlier in the day and copy/pasted it to me on MSN.
    I thought it very good and worth posting.


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    very nice ill give it 2 thumbs up .........

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    On a side note,his dream came true and the girl he loves ,loves him as well.She was the inspiration for the poetry.


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    Hmmm...
    Do people ever discredit poetry here?

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    People mostly tell you what they liked, and what you can improve on . BTW I'm glad people liked my poem :).

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    Quote Originally Posted by eh.spoon View Post
    Hmmm...
    Do people ever discredit poetry here?
    Yes actually ...I critique poetry both in a thread and in PMs...if it doesn't flow,or is not a style I like I will tell you. There are many styles of poetry.Freehand is difficult for a few reasons.

    Rhyming words is not as important as evoking emotions.The main goal is to capture the readers attention...draw them into the swirl of the words you use...get them lost in text so emotion arises.

    A poets or writers job is to ensnair you in a delicate,lovely dance of words.
    Capture the reader and hold their attention with emotion and flair...be graceful and dance with them.


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