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    Cool Poems (3) by me.

    Well hello! It is very delightful to be apart of BS.
    I'm new here, so I figured posting some of my poetry would be a nice idea.


    -Kyle Sisneros
    "Sights We Cannot See"

    Settled on transparent tree tops

    Placid flakes of snow,
    A sight I cannot see
    Only something that I know.
    Like the infinite air we breathe
    And bringer of days life
    Young dawns that rise!
    Replacer of the nights.

    And though bare I did not
    Witness to the seas of blue!
    Painted on their canvas
    That we lie between,
    I and you.

    Nor did either eye
    Notice the stars circled in
    Vast space.
    The mountains, forests and oceans
    Placed in their perfect place.

    These sights I cannot see
    Only something that I know
    Like the infinite love we hold
    Patient to be shown.


    -Kyle Sisneros
    "The Desert I'm Lost In"
    Blisters to my canopy,
    As heaven to my hell.
    Sweet as sin is she
    For, to her, my heart has fell.
    And illusions raise false hope,
    As drink to quench athirst
    For her water's polluted with taupe
    Were clear as crystal first,
    While no remorse is passed
    As no memory forgotten.
    Until death takes life at last,
    She is the desert I'm lost in.


    -Kyle Sisneros
    "Stages of Morning"

    Dew forms and settles
    On the green of new morning
    Enlighting me

    Volcanoes erupt
    Birds sing and flowers, they dance
    Between her and I

    Laughter, hugs, kisses
    Moments of remembrance
    Beautiful was life

    Swiftly cunning, she
    In a bind I lay to die
    Awaiting release




    I hope ya dig it =]
    -Kyle



    P.S.
    All of my poetry is legally copyrighted and protected by a lawyer.
    Not that it's worth a legal case, but I would prefer to have a stamp if any of my poetry is to be shared from this website in relation to having to take it to court.
    I'm sorry buy my poetry is a big part of my life and it's extremely disrespectful to steal someone's inner most thoughts and emotions and mark them as your own.

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    I enjoyed the first one the most out of the three. I believe that it has the best flow as it where. However I enjoyed all three of you poems, very good work :)

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    Thanks yah very much =]

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    I liked them all as well but the second one the most ^^ Good work!! Post more of them please.


    A Light in your Darkness...always there...and burning!!

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    =] Thank you.
    I have more of my poetry on myspace (url in profile).

    Here's another one:

    -Kyle Sisneros

    "Their Shadows Walking"
    Their shadows, they walk the ground
    Making none but whispy sounds
    We hear them before we pass to sleep
    We see them before our tears we weep
    Oh, what more can one desire, but
    The thirll of love when our flesh it cuts

    But a time ago, when all was well
    I held someone that I could tell
    My utmost clever and secret things
    And kiss away the tears life brings
    And walk me through my darkest nights
    And take me close through all my fights
    Though now it seems but just a dream
    My shadows walking, my memories

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    A Light in your Darkness Pamela's Avatar
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    This was evocative and seemed to say a deep love but lost as a shadow.


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    AH YES. Now this is better than those other love poems that was about the same thing over and over again. "Ill take care of you forever would you too???" That kinda stuff. Magnificent. I loved it.

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    Heya, thanks a lot.
    It's the positive feedback that keeps my pencil to paper.
    Much appreciated =D
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    Very nice use of imagery.

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    A Light in your Darkness Pamela's Avatar
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    I concure ,very nice wording that brought images to mind and made emotions swirl. I think you have talent,so do not stop.

    May I suggest you also attempt a short story? They are fun to write and a creative mind such as your own would find it interesting.

    Give it a shot,I would like to read the result.


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    Great idea.. I did write a story poem once, not exactly a short story but more like a story in a poem. haha. I'll have to find it and post it up.

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